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>> Jun 30, 2008

Then you will List ,

--your Tooth brush and My tooth brush
--My Shaving cream
--Your cosmetics
--My books
--Your music player
--My clothes
--Your clothes
--A comb that we will share.
--Some medicines

I will check
And pick up the pen
To add

--
--
+ --My Love
--Your love?

Somehow
of all the things,
it had to be mentioned
if for once we forget
To leave it behind.

And pretend
We didn't ,
till date.

SoUmY@



[Stone me .I know weirdness has its limits]

11 well-wishers:

Usha Pisharody June 30, 2008 2:19 AM  

No, not weird at all...

You'd be surprised how close this is to reality!

Fantastic imagination! I say that because I know, for sure, you haven't lived this:D

Great verse, Soumya, absolutely a stunner of a poem!

Kalm-na June 30, 2008 2:55 AM  

dis is weird????????????
m a weirdo den
ma taste!!!!!!!

!nversed Poignancy! June 30, 2008 3:33 AM  

hehe..yeah..!!
3 cheers for innovation!!(weirdness as you say..:P)

Loved the last stanza - it perhaps sums up the entirety if the write..:)

Lovely thoughts portrayed.!!

Winnie the poohi June 30, 2008 11:59 PM  

:)

Oh yeah not weird at all! new template I liked it!

Muse July 01, 2008 12:00 AM  

Another slap on the cheek..grrr..now you are too fond of doing it,I see!!!:):)


Somehow
of all the things,
it had to be mentioned
if for once we forget
To leave it behind.

And pretend
We didn't ,
till date.

An absolutely brilliant way to end it!!

And no,you aren't weird!!!

Rukhiya July 01, 2008 7:54 AM  
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Rukhiya July 01, 2008 7:59 AM  

Innovation is not weirdness, and it takes someone like you to interlace novel structure with ground reality.

An absolute treat for those who havent been thru it, for the structure.

For those, less fortunate, another episode o incessant bleeding.

You manage both. May nothing of this pass you, ever.

God bless. :)

Cinderella. July 03, 2008 1:30 AM  

OH beautiful !!!

I just loved this piece...so simple and loving.
You have a very keen observant and percepting mind yaar !!


Wow !!

And this aint weird. You know, you just wanna fork out some cheesy cream and butter covere commnst thas why you said that dint you ? The truth is you must have loved it to the hilt..!!!

Sashu... July 04, 2008 4:37 AM  

i loved diz..end f statement :)

Rajesh July 04, 2008 11:16 AM  

the last stanza said it all...but m still squeezing my brain abt the crux of the content...

do read ma blog wen u find time

:) July 08, 2008 3:11 AM  

I love the structure.

I love the sarcasm which shines through the write.

Intelligent skeptic!!

Marvellous.

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